This writing process was easier than I had imagined. I thought that it was going to be difficult to put what I was thinking into words and then to paper. Turns out the words just came to me and hopefully you guys enjoy it. My revision choices had a lot to do with the diction along with lines and enjambments. I threw in a metaphor along with an alliteration and finished with somewhat of a rhyme. I finally moved my poem to the from the middle to the left. Thanks for taking the time to read it, enjoy!
The Man Who Touched the
Clouds
From
Paris to America
Captivated
by the elegant city of New York
Looking
up at his calling, his destiny
The
ugly but breath-taking twin towers
1,360
feet above the ground
Confederates
posing as delivery men
Slowly
but surely making their way to the top
Soon
they would be on the roof, preparing
Preparing
for something never attempted
Looking
down at the tiny figures that are people
Then
across to the opposing tower
Phillipe Petit would make history
Petit
anxious but excited
Bothered
but blown away
Having
cold feet but eventually becoming cool, calm, and collected
Walked on a tight rope back and forth the
World Trade 8 times
Facing charges that would soon be dropped
Wondering
was it worth it
Knowing
that the man who touched the clouds
Would
be a someone people would never forget
Hey Cameron! First of all I want to say that I like your choice of title, it gives a nice outlook of what I'm going to be reading, I also liked how you tied the title into your poem at the very last stanza third line down. While reading your poem I noticed that you added repetition at the last word in the second stanza connecting it to the first word of the third stanza, it creates a nice flow. I enjoyed reading your poem!
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