I would say the initial writing of it maybe took all of an hour before I had to get into work.The revision process, for me usually takes the most time as I think about how I want it to flow and what I am trying to say. Usually, I go through about 6 variations of anything that I write before committing it to the computer. This time around for revisions, this is revision copy number 3. I forgot to add in a stanza originally and I tried to break it up so that it would not be a run on sentence, so I am happy that this was less revising. So, without further ado I hope you enjoy my poem.
One Moment
Above the
world I thrive,
Teetering between
life and death,
With my
balancing pole to keep me from straying,
I walk
hand in hand with my creator.
The wind races
up from the street below,
Throwing
it's rage at my body,
Trying to
scare me,
To take me
off the thin metal path I set forth.
My resolve
is solid as a rock.
My body as
light as a feather.
Knowing my
dream has become reality.
8 months
of the candle being burned at both ends,
Many masks
were called upon, in order for this one moment.
The long
arm of the law stands before me,
His face
holds the promise to uphold the rules of man,
Yet, his
eyes sparkle with the desire to be entertained.
I smile,
I, gave him
a show,
One, all
the world will know.
Beyond the
mist of the cool, damp morning,
Screams
and shouts fill my ears,
Pushing me
forward, sending encouragement and strength in the air.
It is then
I realize,
All the
world is my stage,
I am, but
a mere artist,
One who
has proven the impossible, possible.
That's awesome that you take so much time to write and revise and put so much emphasis on revisions! The structure that you used to write this is how I wrote mine too; using multiple stanzas to break up ideas and varying from long stanzas, to short ones. I think its awesome how you wrote through the eyes of Petite and your diction makes this very entertaining to read.
ReplyDeleteHi Amanda! I liked that you chose to write your poem about when he was getting caught by the police but he just smiles and breaks out into a little dance. I thought that was a very couragous thing of him to do. My favorite line in your poem was "8 months of the candle being burned at both ends". I can't rememeber if that was a quote that Philippe said or not but I really thought it showed how long the process took.
ReplyDeleteI liked your usage of end-stopped lines and enjambed lines! Especially when you write, "Knowing my dream has become reality." it really puts a powerful meaning in perspective because the sentence is all alone, and it is terminated with a period at the end. Nice job! Your poem was very entertaining to read!!
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