tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8125665695553174004.post8870341527653859473..comments2023-03-25T05:43:55.623-07:00Comments on 10:30 Writing to Discover and Share: Exercise One, To live a dream by Caitlin Mashhadian Mike Lohrehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05832313501793243606noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8125665695553174004.post-85187782377196759972014-09-11T09:32:32.835-07:002014-09-11T09:32:32.835-07:00Caitlin, just a good job with the poem. It seemed ...Caitlin, just a good job with the poem. It seemed to capture my imagination of the work that Philippe started by taking the risk of being thrown into jail for his dream. and in the end ended up being something that the entire city of New York was caught up uniqueness of what he was doing. Despite the fact that he could have died, its the fact that he became this pillar of inspiration to everyone who had or was working toward a dream. Amanda Braceyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08165666418001601480noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8125665695553174004.post-51411161415516346302014-09-11T09:06:30.372-07:002014-09-11T09:06:30.372-07:00Hey Caitlin! I really enjoyed how you described Ph...Hey Caitlin! I really enjoyed how you described Philipe Petite as seizing the entire city of New York! Because he really did seize New York City on that August morning. Everyone was watching him, and everyone couldn't help but feel amazed. Your poem was splendid as well! Nice job!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01952528983358395309noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8125665695553174004.post-53627431519350558052014-09-11T08:29:59.122-07:002014-09-11T08:29:59.122-07:00Overall your poem was very good! I enjoyed reading...Overall your poem was very good! I enjoyed reading your introductory paragraph and the revisions you made. The one line in the middle of the poem "he was free".. At that point I stopped and actually re-read the first part and it just all around flowed. Nice work! Cameron Watsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03467815783846126226noreply@blogger.com